Its not bad however.
I wouldn't say the problem with this song is that it doesn't flow more so that its forced to flow. The beat seems to go off into its own direction here and there at times that in my opinion don't match with the song. It deffenatly needs more instrumentation for sure. Its not a horrid song or anything. In fact its got a pretty nice concept. Just needs a bit more luv put into it! Keep it up for sure!
Wyldfyre1